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Intrigue (an epic)

door killea

Intrigue


At the waterside café De Tering
she sat with her new fiancé
drinking a coffee Italiano
already before noon that day
she smiled blasé at his adoration
whipped around with her long hair
watched other people go by
stuck her beautiful nose in the air
beyond her man, sat another
so grand, he smiled quite sly
she gave him a most mundane look
and winked with her left eye
he lifted an eyebrow, crooked grin
though she lowered her eyes
he sniffed luscious smell of sin
lifting four fingers so she could see
he pointed to his golden fob watch
she gave the slightest nod
he stood up a pat on his crotch


to be continued..

 

feedback van andere lezers

  • alie_jankind
    knappe sfeerbeschrijving

    groet
    killea: thank you Alie
    xx
    j
  • killea
    Seems to me they are both proffesionals
    Somehow this reminds me of "The unfinished tales of Genie and Toady" Wasn't that fun to write those ...

    http://www.writehistory.be/?p=gedicht&id=36474

    xxxmau
    killea: thank you Mau, in future use your own log-in, otherwise people will think I'm cheating....
    xxx
    j
  • ivo
    en nadien wat gebeurde er toen?
    knap geschreven
    killea: the story will continue, Ivo, thank you for reading
    xx
    j
  • hettie35
    Weer prachtig geformuleerd,
    groetjes Hettie
  • Wee
    Exciting!
    Nice name: café De Tering :)
    x
    killea: isn't it just! thank you Wee
    xx
    j
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