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Southern Comfort (senryu)

door killea

Southern Comfort


one-winged swan cries out
there's a cold wind coming now
wish you were still here

 

feedback van andere lezers

  • andremoortgat
    wish the sun came here
    (with the other wing)
    killea: the sun is here but it's bitter cold...
    xx
    j
  • jan
    what happened to the swan June?
    xxx
    j

    killea: In the gracht there was a pair, one with a broken wing with just the ligaments sticking out. His mate found another, better looking specimen and left him to go South. So he just hangs around by himself.
    xxx
    j
  • bragt
    mooi

    (vrije vertaling)
    de vleugels wiekten
    totaal niet meer g'lijktijdig
    zelfs niet beschuttend
    killea: yes, and now he hangs out with the ducks - see my repy to Jan
    xx
    j
  • Danvoieanne
    Beautifull ...
    killea: Thank you Anne
    xx
    j
  • johan
    Swans mate for life...
    killea: That's how it's supposed to be Johan
    xx
    j
  • Mistaker
    Matthew's?
    Beautiful senryu June.

    Greta xx
    killea: many thanks Greta
    xx
    j
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